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-en if this paper in your hand was once
an Aspen, thick with sunny leaves; around
the base of wet and living wood, a ground
that reeks of life and death at once, then conc-

-entrate, and know at least in brief the grand
machine you sleep in, twitching fingers, won-
-dering just how one feels a texture, sun
lights warmth, bare prickled skin, bare feet in sand.

Oh this body. How I will tend to it
seventy-five or eighty. How I will
bend arthritic knees, by five windows, still,
the summers passing. Faithful friend! Now, bit

by bit, you close each window to its clasp.
This paper in your hand was once an Asp-
www.123inspiration.com/identit…

Although I don't know if paper generally gets made from aspen or not. Probably not.

Hope it's not too distracting, all the word splits. Coul-
-dn't help it.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-01-10
Bowlesian Sonnet by Bobibillius ( Suggested by LaBruyere and Featured by BeccaJS )
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014
Holy fuck, I hadn't noticed you got a DD on this.

Here's a belated congrats! Very much deserved
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supergeek17 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ohh, this poem. I love the cyclic structure, it's so wonderfully done. :heart: Definitely worth the DD-- congratulations! 
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
There are some interesting sounds here, and I found the conceit of aggressive word-breaking fresh here. Thanks for sharing.
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:iconsciencevsart:
sciencevsart Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The word splits are really well done. Not distracting, it lends a style and jerky motion to the whole thing.
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magdalenacaracol Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
I think this is per-
-fect<3
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TigerRose1329 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
At first I didn't understand the "-en" at the beginning, but when I reached the end I got it.  That's cool how you made it like a circle.  The rhymes with the word splits are clever too.   
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WilliamDallwitz Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Student General Artist
amazing
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:iconneurotype:
neurotype Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The breaks are messing with my mind. I like it.
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:iconastrangeallure:
astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Clever and beautiful...I love it....visual impact as well as a trip for the mind and soul. :love:
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:iconlochley:
lochley Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
This is beautiful, congratulations on the dd!
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:iconimagineapplescruffs:
ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow!!! Such a wonderful puzzle of a poem! I read it twice to see how it sounded as you wrote it and as it would be if I read it like prose. 
This is indeed a unique work in my eyes! Congrats on the DD!!! :clap:

:peace:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :party:
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Liked it as a DLD... Congratulations on the wider audience. :)
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:iconrobson666:
robson666 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist
congratulations to the well deserved Daily Deviation Clap Clap
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:iconkyanitearcher:
KyaniteArcher Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love how the word splits seem to create a continuous loop. :clap:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Student Writer
"was once and Asp-" should be "..an Asp-", no? Forgive me if I'm wrong however.

Great piece, congrats on the DLD :3
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:iconbobibillius:
Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Thanks! And thanks for the correction, I don't know how many times it takes that I comb these things over, only to miss something so obvious... correction made.
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hey! A DLD; Congratulations! :sun:
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:iconbobibillius:
Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Thank you! I nearly shot an eyebrow off my head when I saw the mornings message total.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What a wonderful chiasmatic ending. Though the last line says "...was once and Asp-" and I think you meant "...was once an Asp-". At least, I think that makes more sense. And seventy-five should have a hyphen in between, right?
Anyway, great on you for being able to produce such concise lines! A well-deserved DLD.
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:iconbobibillius:
Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
oh my gosh... how many thousands of times I comb these things over... sigh...

Thank you kindly. Corrections made.
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:icontheglassiris:
TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well your work paid off because it's perfect now. :D
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:iconbobibillius:
Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013
:)
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Whoa, this is brilliant!
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:iconbobibillius:
Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Thank you kindly. :)
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here dailylitdeviations.deviantart.…


Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.



Keep writing and keep creating.

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:iconbobibillius:
Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Oh my goodness! Thank you very much - I can't wait to read the others in the article.
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:iconbluezbreakr:
Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
Best sonnet I've read in quite a damn long time. 
I had an eensy "holy shit" moment at the last line. 
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:iconbobibillius:
Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
Thanks - nice to get a flat out honest comment. It wasn't actually going to circle, until my wife informed me that you can't just refer to an aspen as an asp, because that's a snake... so I made a circle instead.
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
Give your wife a fraction of that "Favorite" as well, then! :D

Excellent work!
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No, 'Georgia Pine' grown in rows like corn.
But no matter, a great read. :)
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:iconbobibillius:
Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
Wait, they actually grow pines specifically to use them for paper? This takes 'gardening' to a whole different level.
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yep, a crop that's been feeding southern paper mills for many decades. 'Managed Timberlands' are reseeded like any other crop and harvested every 10-20 years.
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Bobibillius Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
Wow. Well, I guess it beats chopping down a rain forest.
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ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My thoughts exactly!
Are you breathing? Thank a tree! ;)

:peace:
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