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The apple trees, in pearly sighs
Are blooming 'neath the late may skies.
I know there's time this afternoon,
And storms are brewing in the gloom

So with a pen and greatest care
I'll gather all the blossoms there
And place them down upon the page,
For some young mind and distant age.

I know, that many years from now,
When winds have rent those petals down;
When bitter fruits will bend them low
Whose branches once were laid with snow,

This gnarled and old crabapple tree,
With fruits a sourful sight to see,
Will lack in sweeter public taste,
And plummet to the ground in waste.

But then, as so things are, my friend,
Recall that once, when near your end,
This crooked bow held softer things,
And bloomed beneath an angels wings.
:iconbobibillius:
It was raining, and my mother in law noticed that the crab apples were all in bloom, and commented that it wouldn't last very long with all this rain coming this weekend... and honestly, the invitations don't get better than that.

Speaking of which, it's my wife's birthday on the 23rd, "Eefera," on DA - so everyone wish her a happy one!
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~lydia-wyverne Sep 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I came back to read this and now it jerks a little when I notice typos, and I'm only doing this to be nice, not picky but:

"And storms |and| brewing in the gloom"

but beyond that picky-ness, I do love this. <3
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:iconbobibillius:
And just when I've gone over it for the thousandth time before posting...
Thank you though, and don't worry about it. I'm just glad you enjoyed the piece in spite of it.
I can't stand that that got past me. It's so terribly obvious.
There. That should be better.
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*Parsat May 29, 2011  Student Writer
Sourful sight to see...what a sweet line. Very well controlled. :)
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:iconbobibillius:
Thank you; I'm glad you caught it. Sometimes I worry things like that go unnoticed.
Oh, and thank you for the favorite as well :)
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:iconcountchristoph:
In the second line, "'neath" is misspelled, and I believe "crabapple" is normally written as one word.

Otherwise, well done!
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:iconbobibillius:
Thank you; edits made. And thank you for the fav as well :)
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:iconcountchristoph:
You're welcome!
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*rlkirkland May 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
A pleasant lilt to it. :)
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:iconcountchristoph:
Very nice, but in the second line of the fourth stanza, I think you may mean "sight" rather than "site".
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